Love
foretold
years ago.
Soundless like snow.
Hanging in the trees,
floating on a summer breeze.
Precious time now spent together,
we enter the realms of forever.
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A LOVE FORETOLD
A nonet
Reviews (3)
Berniethebard
8/30/2026
Thank you very much for your kind words. The last line is "we enter the realms of forever" which has 9 syllables. I like the line you picked out too.
Katharine Folkes
9/1/2026
A lovely poem, Bernie. It reads softly like the falling snow and simmer breeze, flowing on, everlasting. Sounds perfect to me! :) Beautiful!
Berniethebard
9/1/2026
Thank you very much Katharine.
Rachelle Allen
9/2/2026
Ahhh. Everyone's hope when a relationship blossoms, right? Forever love. You've captured it beautifully. xoxo
Berniethebard
9/2/2026
Thank you Rachelle. That was the aim for sure. xoxo
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Rachel Gosling
9/3/2026
The Words That Got to Me
Soundless like snow. I do love a bit of sibilance!
Suggestions / Possible Tweaks
on a summer breeze. I liked the idea but this phrase felt a little hackneyed.
I enjoyed the simplicity and sentiments expressed in this one. From Love at the start to forever at the end, this had grace and felt genuine.
Berniethebard
9/3/2026
Thank you very much both for your comment and your suggestion. Hackneyed is maybe a bit harsh. There are words I like to use when I write this sort of poem, words that provide a link between them. Breeze is one of those, along with thread and leaves.
8/30/2026
There is a lovely gentleness to this, Bernie. “Soundless like snow” particularly got to me; such a simple image, but it captures beautifully the idea of something arriving almost unnoticed. I also enjoyed the craft of building the nonet upwards, allowing the poem to grow from that single word, “Love”, towards forever. I did get a little confused at the end, though. I can follow the syllable count perfectly from one through to eight, but I can't find the nine-syllable final line. If the image is intended to complete the poem, I'm still only finding eight syllables there, unless I've missed something. A lovely little piece regardless, and perhaps you've simply left me searching for that final piece of the puzzle.