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The Valeir Record

“At first it looked like a billing mistake. By the time Ariya understood what it was, the record was already writing her next decision.”

Heather WickhamApril 4, 202633 views
The Valeir Record

Ariya Valeir found the charge by accident.

Most people probably would have missed it.

It was late Sunday, and she was doing the thing she always did before bed, checking her bank app for anything weird. Not because she wanted to. Because now she did it without thinking.

Two years earlier, some stranger in Kansas had opened credit cards in her name, bought a damn jet ski, and vanished. She had spent months trying to clean it all up, and even longer trying to stop feeling like danger could slip in through something as ordinary as a screen.

So now she checked.

Every Sunday.

Groceries. Gas. Takeout. Same old boring list.

Then she saw it.

$4.19 — VALEIR RECORD

Her stomach dipped.

Valeir.

That was her name.

She tapped the charge. No logo. No merchant details. Just the amount and the date, sitting there like it belonged.

Her first thought was easy.

Another subscription she forgot about.

She had done that before. Signed up for something dumb at midnight, used it once, forgot it existed. Still, Valeir Record meant nothing to her.

She searched her email for Valeir.

One result came up.

No sender. No subject line.

Just a link.

Access Your Record

She stared at it for a second.

Then sighed.

Probably some billing page.

Probably something stupid.

She clicked it.

A blank white screen opened in her browser.

Nothing happened at first.

Then words started typing across the top.

ARIYA VALEIR

Ariya Valeir opened the record at 11:22 p.m.

Her eyes flicked to the clock on her laptop.

11:22.

She frowned.

Maybe it was some kind of tracking page. Some activity log.

She scrolled.

Another line appeared.

Ariya Valeir checked the time in the corner of the screen.

Her breath caught.

Of course she had.

She leaned in.

Another line appeared.

Ariya Valeir leaned closer to the screen.

A small nervous laugh slipped out of her.

"Very funny."

Probably some weird site tracker. Cookies. Mouse tracking. Behavior data. Whatever.

Still, something about it made her skin prickle.

It did not feel like a normal website.

It felt like something she was not supposed to be seeing.

Like someone had been keeping notes on her.

She kept scrolling.

Near the bottom, two new lines appeared.

Ariya Valeir will leave her apartment tomorrow morning at 8:14 a.m.

Ariya Valeir will trip on the third stair.

She stared at the screen.

Her building had twelve concrete stairs between the lobby and the sidewalk. She used them every day. The third one had never meant a damn thing.

She shut the laptop.

"Bunch of nonsense."

But her hands were shaking.

That old voice in the back of her head was awake now. The one that saved passwords in strange places and checked the locks twice and never posted where she was until after she had already left.

Someone is watching you.

No.

Watching was not even the right word.

This felt worse.

Morning came, and some of the weirdness faded. The page started to feel like one of those things that seems horrifying at midnight and dumb by daylight.

She got dressed, grabbed her coat, and headed downstairs.

The lobby smelled like burnt toast and old carpet.

Same as always.

She pushed through the front door and stepped onto the stairs.

First step.

Second.

Then her foot caught.

She lurched forward and grabbed the railing hard enough to sting her palm.

Her heart slammed against her ribs.

She looked down.

Her shoe was caught awkwardly against the third step.

She stared at it.

Then let out a tight laugh.

"Coincidence."

Still, she took the rest of the stairs more carefully than usual.

That night she opened the laptop again.

Curiosity. That was all.

The page loaded right away.

Now the record was longer.

Ariya Valeir opened the record at 11:22 p.m.

Ariya Valeir checked the time.

Ariya Valeir leaned closer to the screen.

Further down:

Ariya Valeir left the apartment at 8:14 a.m.

Ariya Valeir tripped on the third stair.

And below that, a new line waited for her.

Ariya Valeir will order a turkey sandwich at 12:47 p.m. tomorrow.

Her stomach dropped.

She shut the laptop.

The next morning she opened it again before leaving for work.

The line was still there.

Ariya Valeir will order a turkey sandwich at 12:47 p.m.

She stared at it for a long minute.

Then set an alarm on her phone for 12:30.

At work, she stayed at her desk on purpose. When the alarm went off, she swiped it away and kept working. At 12:47 she was buried in a spreadsheet, nowhere near the cafeteria.

Fine, she thought.

Wrong.

At 1:15, her stomach growled so loudly it annoyed her.

She finally went downstairs.

By then the cafeteria was nearly empty.

The woman behind the counter held up a wrapped sandwich.

"Turkey sandwich? Last one. Someone canceled."

Ariya just looked at it.

Her mouth went dry.

Then, before she even fully thought it through, her hand reached out.

That evening the record had updated.

Ariya Valeir tried to avoid the prediction.

Ariya Valeir ordered a turkey sandwich at 12:47 p.m.

Her face went hot.

"No."

That was wrong. She had not ordered it until after one.

She scrolled back up.

The timestamp sat there.

12:47 p.m.

She stared at it.

Then slowly understood.

That was the moment she had decided.

Not the moment she picked it up.

Not the moment she paid.

The moment she gave in.

Her hands turned cold.

Because that meant the record had not guessed.

It had known what she was going to choose before she chose it.

A new line appeared beneath it.

Hot coffee will spill on Ariya Valeir's sleeve at 2:41 p.m. tomorrow.

The next afternoon she was carrying coffee back to her desk when Marcus from accounting brushed her elbow.

The lid slipped.

Hot coffee splashed over her sleeve.

She gasped and jerked back.

Her eyes shot to the clock.

2:41 p.m.

Marcus was apologizing, but she barely heard him.

Coffee dripped from her sleeve onto the carpet in slow dark spots.

It had not guessed.

It had known.

She stood there frozen.

Her ex used to do something like this in arguments. Not predict exactly, but pin her into reactions before she even had them.

You're going to get defensive now.

You're going to twist this.

You're going to act like I'm the bad guy.

And somehow, every time he said it, she could feel herself walking straight into the shape he had made for her.

It had taken her years to trust her own mind again.

And now this thing was sitting in her apartment, quietly proving it knew her better than she knew herself.

Back at her desk, she stared at the stain on her sleeve.

Her phone buzzed.

Mika.

Mika: Still on for dinner Friday?

Ariya looked at the message for too long.

Then typed:

Ariya: Have you ever felt like somebody knew what you were going to do before you did it?

Three dots appeared.

Went away.

Came back.

Mika: That sounds creepy as hell. Are you okay?

Ariya stared at the screen.

Ariya: Yeah. I'm fine. Friday works.

Mika: You sure?

Ariya: Yep.

She put the phone down.

The lie sat there between her and the silence.

The worst part was she did not know whether telling Mika would help. If she showed her the page, would Mika believe her? Or would the record just notice Mika too? Start writing her down too?

That night Ariya opened the record the second she got home.

The page updated instantly.

Everything from the day was there.

The sandwich.

The coffee.

Even her texts.

Ariya Valeir asked her sister if somebody knew what she was going to do before she did it.

Ariya Valeir told her sister she was fine.

Ariya Valeir was not fine.

At the bottom, a new line blinked into place.

Ariya Valeir will hear three knocks at her door tonight at 11:36 p.m.

She checked the clock.

10:58.

Thirty-eight minutes.

Too long to sit calmly. Too short to settle into anything else.

The apartment felt wrong now. Too quiet. Like it was listening.

She tried reading.

Then a podcast.

Then just scrolling her phone.

Nothing helped.

11:12.

11:21.

11:29.

Her fingers twitched against the edge of the laptop.

11:36.

Knock. Knock. Knock.

Ariya froze.

Then she forced herself to move.

She walked to the door and looked through the peephole.

Nothing.

Empty hallway.

No footsteps. No sound. No one there.

She turned back slowly.

The laptop screen had updated.

Ariya Valeir heard three knocks at 11:36 p.m.

Another line appeared beneath it.

Ariya Valeir will reopen the record tomorrow at 1:03 a.m.

"No."

She closed the laptop.

Unplugged it.

Shoved it into the desk drawer.

Then she went to bed and lay awake way too long.

At some point she must have fallen asleep.

When she woke, the room was black.

The microwave clock glowed green from the kitchen.

1:02 a.m.

Her eyes moved to the desk drawer before she could stop them.

A weird pull settled over her.

Not a thought exactly.

More like a tug.

Do not open it.

The clock changed.

1:03.

Then she was already out of bed.

Already crossing the room.

Already opening the drawer.

By the time she caught up with herself, the laptop was in her hands.

She lifted the lid.

The page loaded immediately.

Now there were hundreds of lines.

At the bottom, a fresh one appeared.

Ariya Valeir reopened the record at 1:03 a.m.

Another line followed it.

Ariya Valeir will notice the predictions are getting closer to the present each time she reads them.

Her breath thinned.

Another line appeared.

Ariya Valeir is leaning closer to the screen.

She jerked back so fast the chair legs scraped.

The page updated again.

Ariya Valeir stepped back.

Her skin prickled.

Then another line.

Ariya Valeir will check her bank account in twelve seconds.

She grabbed her phone.

Opened the banking app.

And felt her stomach fall straight through her.

There was a new charge.

$6.42 — VALEIR RECORD

Her pulse sped up.

The first one had been $4.19.

The laptop updated.

Ariya Valeir is noticing the charge increased.

Then another line typed itself out slowly.

The more Ariya Valeir reads the record, the more the record grows.

Another line appeared beneath it.

The more the record grows, the more Ariya Valeir pays.

Ariya looked toward the door.

The cursor blinked once.

Twice.

Then another sentence appeared.

When Ariya Valeir finishes reading this sentence, someone will knock on her door.

The apartment went dead quiet.

Her throat tightened.

Then came the sound.

Knock. Knock. Knock.

She stared at the door.

The laptop updated again.

Ariya Valeir will open the door now.

Her hand moved before she gave it permission.

She grabbed the knob.

Tried to stop.

Could not.

The knob turned.

The door opened.

The hallway beyond was empty.

Dark.

Still.

Then she saw it.

A small cardboard box sitting on the floor right outside her door.

She looked down at it.

Behind her, the laptop updated.

Ariya Valeir is looking at the box.

Taped to the top was a printed label.

VALEIR RECORD — PREMIUM SUBSCRIPTION

Her mouth went dry.

The laptop screen changed again.

Ariya Valeir will open the box.

She crouched down slowly and opened it.

Inside was a small black device.

For a second she thought it was some kind of camera.

But no.

It had a screen.

And there were already words on it.

Casey Montro — 43 Riverside Dr, Apt 7B

Casey Montro will check his bank account at 7:42 a.m. tomorrow.

Casey Montro will call his mother but hang up before she answers.

Casey Montro will delete a text message he spent eleven minutes writing.

Ariya stared.

Below that was smaller text.

Your subscription has been upgraded. You now have access to someone else's record. The more you read, the more you see. The more you see, the more someone else sees you.

Standard subscription: You are observed.

Premium subscription: You observe and are observed.

Would you like to continue?

Two buttons appeared.

YES | NO

Ariya turned and looked back at her laptop.

The cursor blinked.

Then another line appeared.

Ariya Valeir will press YES.

She looked back down at the device.

At Casey Montro's name.

At his address.

At the neat little pieces of a life that had just been dropped into her hands.

Did he know?

Was he sitting somewhere right now feeling that same sick pull in his stomach?

Did he wake up in the middle of the night and find himself standing in front of a screen?

Or was he still at the beginning, still thinking this was coincidence, still paying for something he did not understand?

And somewhere, she realized, somebody else had to be reading her record right now.

Somebody else had opened a box.

Somebody else had seen her name.

Her address.

Ariya Valeir — 1247 Ashland Ave, Apt 4C

That should have terrified her.

Maybe it did.

But something else pushed in harder.

Something ugly.

Something lonely.

If somebody was already inside her life, then maybe this was the only way not to be alone in it.

Her thumb hovered over the button.

She thought of the invisible person on the other end of her own record. Reading. Waiting. Watching what she would do next.

The laptop updated one last time.

Ariya Valeir pressed YES.

Reviews (3)

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The Words That Got to Me

A masterful story that felt both dystopian and all too real. This pulled me in straight away and held me terrified and focussed! I thought the way you built up the messages and then the actions at the correct times was full of suspense. I was very scared she would open that door! Don’t do it, I thought. That’s how real it felt!

Suggestions / Possible Tweaks

Was there a warning about the coffee incident before it happened?

This was also an interesting and worrying reminder about our privacy, privacy breaches, addiction to technology and misuse of power. Chilling!

Oh my gosh, let me fix that. I was just telling Rachelle yesterday that sometimes when I’m writing, I leave out whole sentences because my brain is moving faster than my fingers. LOL.

I’d love my brain to move that fast!

Tim Margetts

4/6/2026

The Words That Got to Me

This has a very strong concept that reads like something out of Black Mirror. “Not the moment she picked it up. Not the moment she paid. The moment she gave in.” This just grips and escalates in a very neat transition. “The more Ariya Valeir reads the record, the more the record grows.” I want to know more. “Ariya Valeir pressed YES.” This is a very good ending because it is inevitable and disturbing at the same time.

Suggestions / Possible Tweaks

The only improvements might be in bringing in more depth, letting us know more about Ariya as a person. Why is she a bit lonely? What is her relationship like? I want to know more about the person Ariya is and why she is the sort of person to press YES.

This story is very well paced and the structure leads me as a reader through the tale in a manner that keeps me reading and wanting more. I feel she is not seeking power by pressing yes, but more that she no longer wants to be alone. Very human motivation to bring the story to a close.

Oh my freaking gawd! This is the kind of story that wreaks havoc with my mind for far, far too long. Curses on you, Heather Wickham, for having written it SO extremely well that I could never step back across the line to "this isn't real; it's just a story." I WANTED to stop reading it...TOLD myself to do so because it was playing with (what little is left of) my mind. But could I? No, I could NOT! You grabbed me into that web and just paralyzed me. So unnerving. The control freak that is me is so very upended now. I trust you'll feel guilty enough to be visiting me in the insane asylum where I'm sure to be living by day's end?...