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Could Be Life, Could Be Laundry Day

A Sestina, with special thanks to Tim Margetts

Rachelle AllenSeptember 8, 202635 views
Could Be Life, Could Be Laundry Day

In all things, there is a continuous ebb and flow

Dark is supplanted by light

Heavy loads counterbalance those more delicate

Agitations give way to still water

Whirlwinds are followed by a gentle tumble

Turbulent cycles give way to a gentle, rhythmic spin.

 

Fueled by invisible currents that supplant a relentless spin

Through hellish heat, a perpetual flow

Of natural forces induces a free-falling tumble

That, G-d willing, leads again to light,

Like a whale breaching the surface of the water

No longer choosing to be delicate.

 

For after all, what is the purpose of choosing something delicate?

Strong, unending momentum creates a more productive spin

What – beyond contemplation – is the point of still water?

There is progress only in perpetual flow

There is a promise of hope with light

While not denying the imminence of a tumble.

 

But one cannot spend energy on circumventing a tumble

There is no time to waste on being delicate

Instead, focus on the light,

Celebrate the luxury of the pulsing spin

Be mindful of the flow

And do not allow the perpetuation of murky water.

Invite a thorough cleansing, like in deep water

Where there can be no fear of an unplanned tumble,

Just the rhythmic, melodious, untamed flow,

Like a plan that is sometimes delicate,

Always waiting for its chance to spin

After which, all is fresh again and goodness rises toward the light.

And in that light,

From the depths of the water,

There is no more need to anticipate spin,

Or an unexpected tumble,

Just a delicate,

Deliberate flow.

Immersed in the flow of water,

There is a patience that arises with any delicate tumble.

Watch how the inner and outer light will spin.

 

 

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The Words That Got to Me

There is no time to waste on being delicate Instead, focus on the light, Celebrate the luxury of the pulsing spin Be mindful of the flow And do not allow the perpetuation of murky waters. Fabulous advice for life!

I loved this - the workings of a washing machine but also a deep philosophical delve into life's ebbs and flows. What a wise woman you are!

Wise was the very last thing I felt writing this. Frustrated a LOT, ridiculous a REEEEEEAL lot, but wise? Nope. Bless YOU for thinking so, though. Xoxo

That's a difficult form of poem to write. I like the analogy you use of the cycles of a washing machine to reflect the cycles of life. You incorporate washing machine terminology into your poem in a skilful way. I think the two lines that stand out to me are "there is a promise of hope with light while not denying the imminence of a tumble." The ups and downs of life exoressed so poetically.

Oh, Bernie, SOOO extremely difficult. But I persevered, and Tim gave me invaluable suggestions several times (as well he SHOULD since he was the one who inspired me inthe first place...) Since this is supposed to be cyclical, I was told, it reminded me of the Canon in D, which once for preschool dance class, I choreographed as my dancers doing laundry. The parents were in absolute STITCHES throughout, so I thought I'd try it again with this. A little theme-and-variation. Thanks very much for your kind feedback. Xoxo

edited 9/8/2026

I take it you mean the canon in D by Pachelbel, the very same one that has graced a few weddings. And now apparently doing the laundry. That's an epic story. You are very welcome Rachelle and right about the help. xoxo

Tim Margetts

9/8/2026

The Words That Got to Me

“Like a whale breaching the surface of the water” Gloriously opens the poem into something vast and alive. “Immersed in the flow of water, There is a patience that arises with any delicate tumble. Watch how the inner and outer light will spin.” The envoi is very well done; all the words are present, and they feel natural, not shoehorned into place to fit the rules.

Suggestions / Possible Tweaks

“For after all, what is the purpose of delicate?” This is the only place where I felt the line was pointing out the use of the end word. “But one cannot spend energy on the commodity of a tumble” I know what you are trying to say, but 'commodity' just felt a tad abstract and deviated from all of the fantastic, more physical language surrounding it. While it doesn't bother me, purists might point to 'water/waters' In a strict sense, it should be fixed on one or the other... but then, I am all for breaking rules for the sake of the art.

This is a great sestina, Rachelle. You have got subject and form working together very skilfully. It is so easy to find them fighting each other. And with the very nature of a sestina being cyclic, how brilliant to tie that to the cyclic actions of laundry. Some excellent humour, mixed with philosophy, all tumbled around in the drum of a washing machine. Considering you felt challenged by the form, Rachelle, I would say you have more than risen to that challenge. You have produced something thoughtful, playful and unmistakably yours. I will happily accept the special thanks for introducing you to the form – but I accept absolutely no responsibility for any sestina-induced swearing that may have occurred during its construction!

Yesss. I see what you're saying. Thank you for the helping suggestions. I will consider alternatives and make the necessary adjustments! Xo

edited 9/10/2026