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Chronicling the years

Rachelle AllenMarch 26, 202633 views
Forty-five years since we flung our mortarboards into the air,
hugged each other tight,
and declared, "We're free!"
(You have more forehead now, but I'd know those beautiful eyes anywhere.)

Forty-five years, less one day
(after one steamy night)
since I drove you to the train station.

Forty-five years, less one week,
since you began Basic Training.
(Our swan song)

Forty years since, you tell me now,
your wedding day.
(She's beautiful still and so friendly and kind.
She warms my heart.)

Thirty-nine years since your first child
thirty-eight since your second,
thirty-seven since your third.
(All girls – perfect for your tender heart.)

Thirty years in the same house
in the same town.
(Stability was always your strong suit.)

Twenty years since your dad (your rock) died.
Nineteen since you started your own business.
(Your goal since forever.)

Six years since your first grandchild,
five since your second,
four since your third, fourth, and fifth.
(Your girls are prolific!)

Two months since the diagnosis.

One last chance to tell me I was the best First Love
you could ever have hoped for.
(Right back atcha.)



Reviews (4)

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The Words That Got to Me

I loved the countdowns through the years here and then the shock of that ‘Two months since the diagnosis’ line. That’s life, as they say. Having many friends who had had their own diagnosis, this did give me a gulp moment.

A very effective and relatable piece.

there's always some gulping at reunions!! Thank you for this very affirming review. xoxo

The Words That Got to Me

“Forty-five years, less one day (after one steamy night) since I drove you to the train station” really stood out to me. There’s so much history in that one line, and it makes the whole timeline feel personal and real. And the ending—“One last chance to tell me I was the best First Love you could ever have hoped for”—that landed quietly but deeply. It felt like everything came full circle

I really liked how you moved through time in this. It feels reflective without being heavy, and the parenthetical lines add such a natural, human layer to it. You can feel the life behind it, not just the years. This one stayed with me.

Thank you for this beautiful, deeply felt review. I'm feeling a little teary-eyed now. xoxo

Tim Margetts

3/27/2026

The Words That Got to Me

“Forty-five years since we flung our mortarboards into the air…” With this highly visual line, you drop me straight into the time and place. The way you sequence the stanzas by important events and visual imagery is so well done. It sets up a rhythm, and emotionally, it demonstrates the passage of time and a life in a simple form. “Two months since the diagnosis.” is the gutwrencher. The poem's turning point hits like a scorpion's sting. Its very understatement is what gives it power.

Suggestions / Possible Tweaks

Your title is a bit weak compared to the poem's emotional strength. I understand the why, you are placing the poem in a place, but I feel it could still be stronger (ideas that come to mind - The Years Between Us Since We Were Eighteen) I think you missed a comma after house. Thirty years in the same house in the same town. A comma would add a pause and make it read more easily.

This is not a good poem, Rachelle. It is an excellent poem; good does not do it justice. It is full of genuine authenticity that gives it strength and makes it memorable. It’s a quiet, reflective poem about time, first love, and mortality, and its simplicity is largely what makes it so effective.

Wow! From you, this is especially nice to read. Hyperbole is not your schtick, so I appreciate such praise from you very much. I loved your ideas for the title and do definitely see your point. thank you for this lovely feedback. xoxo

Michaela

3/27/2026

The Words That Got to Me

Two months since the diagnosis. One last chance to tell me I was the best First Love you could ever have hoped for. (Right back atcha.)

Suggestions / Possible Tweaks

Most stanzas have a thoughtful comment from you noted in parentheses. Maybe all the stanzas should have this. Just a thought.

Your voice is so clear in this poem. The "right back atcha" was the perfect ending tone to this simple beauty of a love poem to your first love. The ending is serious and brings so much pain, but at the same time caps off a life well lived with an ending that we all must face. Death awaits us all, but it doesn't have to be full of such dramatic darkness...thus, with your last line it gives a lovely send off to a lovely person. (This poem hit me so beautifully that I am actually having trouble expressing myself well in this review...sorry).

I thought you expressed yourself beautifully. I'm going to give a lot of thought to the suggestion about continuing on with the parentheses. Thank you for that feedback. xoxo

Okay, Michaela - I took your suggestion and added parentheses throughout. Did I improve it or weigh it down. I trust the educator in you to be candid. xoxo

Michaela

4/7/2026

I personally really like the parentheses throughout. It keeps your specific voice threaded throughout the poem instead of just a couple of places. And your voice, to me, is the jewel in this poem that brings out the best of the last line that is so poignant.

You sweet talker, you. I will trust your judgment. Thanks for the suggestions. xoxo