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Paranoia

For Tim and Heather - my answer to our challenge!!

Rachelle AllenJune 21, 202632 views
Paranoia

Just beyond the capacity of my

finely tuned aural talents,

I don't so much hear

as feel

the thrum of clandestine words

ricocheting back and forth,

like an antiphonal duet

between bumblebees.

Their indistinguishable strains

rise and fall in pitch

and volley,

lending a familiarity

to the timbre.

Arcs of questions-and-responses tumble forth

beneath the door,

splayed and distorted with distance.

My instincts sense that it's

conspiratorial, low,

to be deliberately out of my earshot.

Disparagements, no doubt,

aimed at me,

spoken secretly,

out of range,

so that I cannot aptly defend myself.

Cowards.

Laughter now.

Muted,

Shameless,

Ribald.

I throw open the door,

ready to unleash a scathing diatribe

upon my murmuring attackers.

Instead, I find my cellphone

wedged between two cushions,

playing an episode of

Everyone Loves Raymond.

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Tim Margetts

6/22/2026

I enjoyed this, Rachelle. The slow progression from vague awareness to absolute certainty is beautifully handled, and the humour lands because the emotional logic is so believable. We've all had moments where incomplete information allowed imagination to fill the gaps. The reveal of the phone between the cushions is perfectly judged—funny, deflating, and just a little uncomfortable because it exposes how readily we can become convinced of things that were never true. An excellent work to capture the idea of 'Murmur'

Thank you, Tim! I appreciate the feedback. You always, always get the big picture, and I love that.

The Words That Got to Me

the thrum of clandestine words ricocheting back and forth, like an antiphonal duet between bumblebees. I loved that image - yes, I could just hear that low buzzing.

There's that old saying - eavesdroppers never hear any good of themselves. This played with that idea, demonstrating the easy path we all trip along at times to paranoia, jealousy and anger. I liked the way you built p the emotional intensity until the narrator was ready to throw open the door and attack. The mobile phone incident was utterly believable.

Thank you, Rachel. This was a challenge set up by Tim Margretts, so I had to rise to it with a little unexpected whimsy!. xoxo